Friday, February 18, 2005

the fifth week

take a break eat
take the third roundabout
and feeling as if only or impossible
desire imagined medinas cool air off
the atlas the geography of a new country
the trip was taking me out of myself and then
what was left? inserting the endless
possibilities from casual to smart
casual and exhausted I blew
myself out

3 Comments:

Anonymous Anonymous said...

break a take about
the feeling happy studio
if only possible the retina
new cool country
trip myself out
geomantic to justify

and what was left
insertion space
smart causality
so tired

what goes on

March 6, 2005 at 1:14 PM  
Anonymous Robert Sheppard said...

One of the things I did when posting the full version of this poem (which is very fine) on Pages was, of necessity to relineate it. It came out as prose..It waqs then I realised that there was something special about this, so I'm going to relineate this in my way (or another way) (a version of an exercise I set students): intuitively ( a couple of hours after dealing with the original):

take a break eat take
the third
roundabout and feeling as
if only or impossible
desire imagined medinas cool
air off
the atlas the
geography of a new country
the trip was taking me out of myself and then what
was left? inserting
the endless
possibilities from casual
to smart casual and
exhausted I
blew myself out

Robert Sheppard

PS I've now Previewed this posting, but I notice that it has printed not my re-write but a strange combination of Iain's original poem and my gestural re-lineation.
Well, it's all about colloboration. So that's what we get. Iain wondered whether our blogs might collaborate on their own! I guess they have!

March 7, 2005 at 3:57 PM  
Anonymous Robert Sheppard said...

Sorry. I've been reading Sinclair all day. This one's an honest Ian.

Robiert

March 7, 2005 at 4:00 PM  

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