Saturday, February 12, 2005

fourth collaboration

The poetry below is part of a long sequence I'm writing about the body and emotion. Do comment by adding to the poem, deleting some of it, or in any way you choose.

this is a full body scan apt to discover the slightest
imperfection in excess body hair or a muscle out of place

don’t do casual
don’t do glance

It was only a branch line a further frame of reference another
addition to the sum of human contact or the careful phrasing of
language left out cell touching cell the prisoners of desire

beneath the single sheet I was moved imperceptibly as if the
friction of hands across skin and all the inner mechanics

3 Comments:

Anonymous Scott Thurston said...

Hi Ian

This theme feels close to my own current concerns. Here's a intertext of yours:

this is a full body apt to discover the slightest
imperfection in excess of place

don’t do casual don’t do
a branch line a further frame of human reference another

human contact or the careful phrasing of language left out touching cell

I was moved imperceptibly

and one for you to have a go at!

Brain Sketches (Infinite Storage)

1
but there are different sorts of lines
lines that slope up gently
level out
drop off expand

lines that go up straight
lines that go down straight
lines on a scale between and beyond

2
walking a track
absorbs the language of
surrounding cells

point to past and future
line

3
you could you this to decide
where a tumour lies
or what hurts or doesn't

the intersections are where
the self becomes

4
I is a line between points
on lines
this is only worth something

if line is a life

the potential is a range too

All best
Scott

February 25, 2005 at 5:30 AM  
Blogger ian said...

Brain Sketches (Infinite Storage)


blood lines
level out
drop off
the language of
surrounding cells
decide where a tumour
lies
or what hurts or
the intersections where
the self becomes
I is a line between points
on lines

this is something

if line is a life

March 6, 2005 at 11:09 AM  
Anonymous Scott said...

Ian

Thanks for your rewrite - I like it. It rubs off the more pedantic lines of reasoning and refreshes the tone to ring clearly on that final line. The question is now where are we at? What is the common ground, if any, in this enquiry? Do we need a reformulation of the territory of body-language or is your take on the body and emotions coming from a different starting point? My own piece was part of a response to a cybernetics lecture I attended at the University of London in 1993. I was interested in the account of brain structure and, I suppose, co-opted it to the broadly structuralist way of thinking about things that I had at the time. Hence the poem was a kind of thought tool for detecting the structure of an emotional situation, based, as it were, on an imagined account of a physical structure. Any thought-feelings on that one?

Very best
Scott

March 15, 2005 at 12:36 PM  

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